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Average Days
Part 1
Part 2
Ulti's Notes:
The original version of this page was done during a time when I was still trying to figure out what I wanted Keito to be, and so I experimented with this sort of... "loveable scamp" type character? Someone who does obviously-wrong things but is well-liked enough to be forgiven. It didn't really work out, and the concept was dropped as I realized his more loveable-goofball potential. It's good that I did, because rooting for someone who randomly embezzles from his friends would've been quite awkward, which is why in the (default) revised version, I instead actively rewrote the dialogue to make his actions more well-intended and not just very well-thought-out.
Original Author's Comment:
08/10/10
So Keito's off the hook and Caiya's got on it. What will happen to the money? If Caiya think's it's a doughnut, then it's fate is sealed, but we don't know that yet. Or rather, you don't know that. I do.
AREN'T THESE CLIFFHANGERS MORE FUNNIER THAN JOKES I SURE HOPE NOT
So Keito's off the hook and Caiya's got on it. What will happen to the money? If Caiya think's it's a doughnut, then it's fate is sealed, but we don't know that yet. Or rather, you don't know that. I do.
AREN'T THESE CLIFFHANGERS MORE FUNNIER THAN JOKES I SURE HOPE NOT
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
AvoryAzion
08/10/10
Poor dama...
Silverlilly
08/10/10
Oh, but it will come back after 8 hours! So why worry?
AvoryAzion
08/11/10
Kirbys don't work like that...they absord ALL they eat...
guestuser
09/14/10
THEY R MORE FUNNIER THAN JOKES!!!!!!!!!!
guestuser
09/15/10
@AvoryAzion:
Apparently not, if Y&K is to be believed...
guestuser
10/08/16
@Silverlilly:
You just had to put that image in my mind, didn't you.
TheJGamer
01/28/17
Raize's ultimate facepalm made me laugh. By the way, what software do you use to make this comic?
Ultizeta
05/18/17
Did I seriously consider these "cliffhangers" and not "jokes"? C'mon, they're not mutually exclusive ideas, past me.
Anyways, I reworked dialogue here to make more sense given Keito's characterization as well as Raize's handling of the situation. I also fixed the larger text in the last panel to look better.
08/10/10
Poor dama...
Silverlilly
08/10/10
Oh, but it will come back after 8 hours! So why worry?
AvoryAzion
08/11/10
Kirbys don't work like that...they absord ALL they eat...
guestuser
09/14/10
THEY R MORE FUNNIER THAN JOKES!!!!!!!!!!
guestuser
09/15/10
@AvoryAzion:
Apparently not, if Y&K is to be believed...
guestuser
10/08/16
@Silverlilly:
You just had to put that image in my mind, didn't you.
TheJGamer
01/28/17
Raize's ultimate facepalm made me laugh. By the way, what software do you use to make this comic?
Ultizeta
05/18/17
Did I seriously consider these "cliffhangers" and not "jokes"? C'mon, they're not mutually exclusive ideas, past me.
Anyways, I reworked dialogue here to make more sense given Keito's characterization as well as Raize's handling of the situation. I also fixed the larger text in the last panel to look better.
Part 3
Ulti's Notes:
God, the whole 'alternate personality' aspect of Caiya was a fucking trainwreck, let me tell you what. This was my method of diverging from the aforementioned "dumb, food-obsessed, hyperactive idiot" tropes that Caiya had displayed during The First Mission. It's... not a TERRIBLE idea, in theory? But it's supremely poorly executed on both fronts.
There's no real rhyme or reason to her personality shifts, aside from a general occasional vibe of "she'll often fall asleep and swap personalities during that" that I sometimes adhere to and other times don't. It's never made clear how much the other sides of her personality remember/understand from their other side. There's no real world parallel to the phenomenon, which didn't stop me from occasionally trying to tie it into actual Personality Disorders or Schizophrenia in some older author comments that I no longer stand by fully. It's... just kind of embarrassing.
Not that this side of Caiya is a problem on her own, no, in fact this is the "main" version of Caiya that I quickly found myself preferring to write. She was intelligent, witty, adventurous, fun-loving, she was an ideal character for the comic. It just didn't feel great after a while to have her 'dumb personality' tacked on, and it took even longer for me to actually delve into what that might mean for her as a character.
Given how much I wound up utilizing the 'smart presonality' for Caiya, though, it retroactively really makes Keito and Raize look like morons for "always forgetting" that she's got two personalities.
There's no real rhyme or reason to her personality shifts, aside from a general occasional vibe of "she'll often fall asleep and swap personalities during that" that I sometimes adhere to and other times don't. It's never made clear how much the other sides of her personality remember/understand from their other side. There's no real world parallel to the phenomenon, which didn't stop me from occasionally trying to tie it into actual Personality Disorders or Schizophrenia in some older author comments that I no longer stand by fully. It's... just kind of embarrassing.
Not that this side of Caiya is a problem on her own, no, in fact this is the "main" version of Caiya that I quickly found myself preferring to write. She was intelligent, witty, adventurous, fun-loving, she was an ideal character for the comic. It just didn't feel great after a while to have her 'dumb personality' tacked on, and it took even longer for me to actually delve into what that might mean for her as a character.
Given how much I wound up utilizing the 'smart presonality' for Caiya, though, it retroactively really makes Keito and Raize look like morons for "always forgetting" that she's got two personalities.
Original Author's Comment:
08/13/10
I did say Caiya can be intelligent. But I changed the rules: She has multiple personalities, so can either be stupid, or smart. Not a very good combination.
I did say Caiya can be intelligent. But I changed the rules: She has multiple personalities, so can either be stupid, or smart. Not a very good combination.
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
AvoryAzion
08/13/10
interesting...
locoroco1
08/13/10
WHHOOOOOOOO! SCHIZNOPHRENIA!
guestuser
09/14/10
SCHIZNOPHRENIA?Wut duz dat mean?
Gobbler9
08/22/11
I like Caiya, even when shes smart but I like her better when shes stupid.
guestuser
10/04/11
schiznophrenia is a multiple personlitty disorder.
castleofwarriors
11/03/11
With her multiple personalities and her Ice ability, that makes her... BIPOLAR!
guestuser
04/07/13
@locoroco1:
Pacmin!
littlekirby61524
12/01/13
Caiya can store things in her stomach, might be useful later on...
TheJGamer
01/28/17
DUN DUN DUUUN
EDIT: Was that a reference to The Three Faces of Eve?
Ultizeta
05/18/17
I actually didn't make any panel changes to this comic. Instead, all that got updated were the borders and color gradients.
08/13/10
interesting...
locoroco1
08/13/10
WHHOOOOOOOO! SCHIZNOPHRENIA!
guestuser
09/14/10
SCHIZNOPHRENIA?Wut duz dat mean?
Gobbler9
08/22/11
I like Caiya, even when shes smart but I like her better when shes stupid.
guestuser
10/04/11
schiznophrenia is a multiple personlitty disorder.
castleofwarriors
11/03/11
With her multiple personalities and her Ice ability, that makes her... BIPOLAR!
guestuser
04/07/13
@locoroco1:
Pacmin!
littlekirby61524
12/01/13
Caiya can store things in her stomach, might be useful later on...
TheJGamer
01/28/17
DUN DUN DUUUN
EDIT: Was that a reference to The Three Faces of Eve?
Ultizeta
05/18/17
I actually didn't make any panel changes to this comic. Instead, all that got updated were the borders and color gradients.
Part 4
Ulti's Notes:
Behold, my ability to stretch out sprites in Photoshop. Truly, I was an unparalleled master of my craft. Please feel free to ignore the fact that I took a wall, randomly decided "the characters can walk through this wall for no reason, and it will randomly teleport them into a completely different area". It won't do you any good to question it.
Wake here introduces another aspect of the KAS that came from the police procedural inspiration: additional teams. The main idea was that Kirby led Division A of the KAS, and there would be other Divisions of smaller teams of Kirbies that would go on their own separate missions. This would allow the KAS to feel like a bigger and more formal organization, and expand the side character cast to a point where I could potentially tell stories with even more characters.
In practice, it doesn't achieve all of that, but I do at least still think the ways in which it made the organization feel a bit more formal and larger were beneficial to the vibe I was setting up, and there were a lot of stories I was able to tell thanks to me setting up the KAS as a larger organization this early.
Wake here introduces another aspect of the KAS that came from the police procedural inspiration: additional teams. The main idea was that Kirby led Division A of the KAS, and there would be other Divisions of smaller teams of Kirbies that would go on their own separate missions. This would allow the KAS to feel like a bigger and more formal organization, and expand the side character cast to a point where I could potentially tell stories with even more characters.
In practice, it doesn't achieve all of that, but I do at least still think the ways in which it made the organization feel a bit more formal and larger were beneficial to the vibe I was setting up, and there were a lot of stories I was able to tell thanks to me setting up the KAS as a larger organization this early.
Original Author's Comment:
08/16/10
Oops, not very funny. Ah well.
Yes, the Director has a name.
No, Wake is not an important character really.
Yes, I like to hit the enter button.
No, I will not give you a life-times supply of free milkshakes.
Oops, not very funny. Ah well.
Yes, the Director has a name.
No, Wake is not an important character really.
Yes, I like to hit the enter button.
No, I will not give you a life-times supply of free milkshakes.
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
Silverlilly
08/16/10
Who's the purple Kirby again?
Ultimate Yoshi
08/16/10
I assume you mean Saia? That's not Saia to the right of Wake, it's a different Kirby altogether.
guestuser
08/16/10
The comic really lack fights. I hope there will be one on the future.
guestuser
08/24/10
But, if the fight is part of the plot, I think you can still advance to the next part.
guestuser
08/25/10
Try to add hair on the Kirbies (except Kirby himself).
guestuser
09/14/10
Don`t b a soloara the hedgehog
guestuser
12/05/10
Where did the background for this strip come from? It looks... 3D.
Ultimate Yoshi
12/06/10
I think it's the backdrop for a stage on the Battleship Halberd, but I just took it from this big spritesheet.
lstaff4
05/13/12
I WANT MILK Shackes
bwarbwarbwar
CAIYA REFERENCE
DONUTDONUTDONUT
ENTAH
Smashfan56
06/05/12
Does anyone else think Panel 2 sounded almost seductive...?
161616
03/19/14
@Smashfan56:
I do.
guestuser
01/30/16
Roar (that wasn't scary)
Ultizeta
05/18/17
The entire layout of this page changed! I also fixed panel 4, which originally was partially transparent for some reason. Finally, the dialogue was fixed here to make the joke at the end make more sense, as well as no longer imply random secrecy.
08/16/10
Who's the purple Kirby again?
Ultimate Yoshi
08/16/10
I assume you mean Saia? That's not Saia to the right of Wake, it's a different Kirby altogether.
guestuser
08/16/10
The comic really lack fights. I hope there will be one on the future.
guestuser
08/24/10
But, if the fight is part of the plot, I think you can still advance to the next part.
guestuser
08/25/10
Try to add hair on the Kirbies (except Kirby himself).
guestuser
09/14/10
Don`t b a soloara the hedgehog
guestuser
12/05/10
Where did the background for this strip come from? It looks... 3D.
Ultimate Yoshi
12/06/10
I think it's the backdrop for a stage on the Battleship Halberd, but I just took it from this big spritesheet.
lstaff4
05/13/12
I WANT MILK Shackes
bwarbwarbwar
CAIYA REFERENCE
DONUTDONUTDONUT
ENTAH
Smashfan56
06/05/12
Does anyone else think Panel 2 sounded almost seductive...?
161616
03/19/14
@Smashfan56:
I do.
guestuser
01/30/16
Roar (that wasn't scary)
Ultizeta
05/18/17
The entire layout of this page changed! I also fixed panel 4, which originally was partially transparent for some reason. Finally, the dialogue was fixed here to make the joke at the end make more sense, as well as no longer imply random secrecy.
Part 5
Ulti's Notes:
Kirby is shown here using a traditional copy ability in that flashback joke panel. That's the Paint Ability, a rare power from Kirby Super Star, but more importantly, it subtly sets up one small aspect that often went overlooked in Kirby Adventure. While most of the Kirby characters (but not all of them) had their one single Stored Ability that they could use, the main, pink Kirby not only had a Stored Ability (of which we will see later) but also access to all abilities via his traditional Copy Abilities, a la the games.
Original Author's Comment:
08/20/10
Sometimes comic ideas come to me on a whim. I couldn't find any good 'advanced' backdrops from Super Star Ultra and so resorted to using a Canvas Curse backdrop. I noticed it was dark and drabby, so made Kirby notice it too. Then I had the idea of Hali painting it. Which made me think of Paint Kirby. Which created this mess. And so on. But I like it. A lot. Fifth panel made me laugh as I was making it because it was so NEON.
ALSO, I updated the cast page to make it look more official. Tell me what you think of the new Kirby Adventure Squad Member Files!
Sometimes comic ideas come to me on a whim. I couldn't find any good 'advanced' backdrops from Super Star Ultra and so resorted to using a Canvas Curse backdrop. I noticed it was dark and drabby, so made Kirby notice it too. Then I had the idea of Hali painting it. Which made me think of Paint Kirby. Which created this mess. And so on. But I like it. A lot. Fifth panel made me laugh as I was making it because it was so NEON.
ALSO, I updated the cast page to make it look more official. Tell me what you think of the new Kirby Adventure Squad Member Files!
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
Marioman12345
09/06/10
Who Is That Brown Kirby That I See In Panel 1?
Marioman12345
09/06/10
And Its Not Hali.
Ultimate Yoshi
09/07/10
That's just another unremarkable Kirby in the same team as Wake, who isn't in the same team is Kirby.
Marioman12345
09/12/10
Ok.
guestuser
09/14/10
Notice the red paint blobs form the word "HI" in the 5th panel.
Jarkes
09/15/10
I read the K.A.S. files, and noticed... Kato's profile mentions "Fanhal." Who's that?
Jarkes
09/15/10
Um... I was looking at your favorites and the fan lists of your comics, and... isn't it kind of, y'know, arrogant to say that your own comic is one of your favorites? Just saying.
Gobbler9
09/16/10
Who`s Kato?
Ultimate Yoshi
09/18/10
1. Jarkes - Firstly, it's KaXo, not Kato, and then Fanhal... well, he'll be revealed later. If there is a later, I'm deciding on what to do for this comic.
2. Jarkes - To me, favorites indicate comics that I like. I obviously like my own comics. They're not my absolute favorite comics here, I just think they're pretty good, hence the favoritization.
3. Gobbler9 - (answered)
guestuser
09/21/10
Is Fanhal the blue Kirby with purple feet?
Neon-J
10/19/10
I don't like the new layout, for the profiles that is, it doesn't fit on my screen. :<
That, and three of the squad members are missing.
NoahTH
01/07/11
I prefer the design in the 5th panel to the current one.
guestuser
04/10/11
So... what exactly did Hali need to see Kirby about? Did the parts with Talzo "attacking" the Squad happen BEFORE these bits, and she needed to see Kirby about that? It's confusing...
Ultimate Yoshi
04/10/11
Hali, knowing of Keito's ambition, was bringing Kirby to her office. She wanted to know why Kirby gave Keito the money to split among Division A, when she knew that Kirby knew of Keito's ambition as well. In the end, I just cut away from that, because I don't think anybody would've really cared at all. It happened, just off-panel.
guestuser
10/10/11
LOL. I didn't notice that before
TheJGamer
01/28/17
Oh gosh, Kirby's the worst painter ever.
Ultizeta
05/18/17
Other than new, non-blurry borders, I only made one small change to this page. See if you can figure out what it is by comparing it to the original page.
CapedLuigisYoshi
05/19/17
Okay, I've been looking at this and the original version for like fifteen minutes now and I can't tell any difference aside from the panel borders. I've just about given up, what's the small change?
Ultizeta
05/19/17
@CapedLuigisYoshi:
The bottom left two pixels in the "k" in panel 5 were missing for some reason in the original comic.
CapedLuigisYoshi
05/19/17
@Ultizeta:
...what
well, dang, I'm glad that's solved, but
how did you even notice that
09/06/10
Who Is That Brown Kirby That I See In Panel 1?
Marioman12345
09/06/10
And Its Not Hali.
Ultimate Yoshi
09/07/10
That's just another unremarkable Kirby in the same team as Wake, who isn't in the same team is Kirby.
Marioman12345
09/12/10
Ok.
guestuser
09/14/10
Notice the red paint blobs form the word "HI" in the 5th panel.
Jarkes
09/15/10
I read the K.A.S. files, and noticed... Kato's profile mentions "Fanhal." Who's that?
Jarkes
09/15/10
Um... I was looking at your favorites and the fan lists of your comics, and... isn't it kind of, y'know, arrogant to say that your own comic is one of your favorites? Just saying.
Gobbler9
09/16/10
Who`s Kato?
Ultimate Yoshi
09/18/10
1. Jarkes - Firstly, it's KaXo, not Kato, and then Fanhal... well, he'll be revealed later. If there is a later, I'm deciding on what to do for this comic.
2. Jarkes - To me, favorites indicate comics that I like. I obviously like my own comics. They're not my absolute favorite comics here, I just think they're pretty good, hence the favoritization.
3. Gobbler9 - (answered)
guestuser
09/21/10
Is Fanhal the blue Kirby with purple feet?
Neon-J
10/19/10
I don't like the new layout, for the profiles that is, it doesn't fit on my screen. :<
That, and three of the squad members are missing.
NoahTH
01/07/11
I prefer the design in the 5th panel to the current one.
guestuser
04/10/11
So... what exactly did Hali need to see Kirby about? Did the parts with Talzo "attacking" the Squad happen BEFORE these bits, and she needed to see Kirby about that? It's confusing...
Ultimate Yoshi
04/10/11
Hali, knowing of Keito's ambition, was bringing Kirby to her office. She wanted to know why Kirby gave Keito the money to split among Division A, when she knew that Kirby knew of Keito's ambition as well. In the end, I just cut away from that, because I don't think anybody would've really cared at all. It happened, just off-panel.
guestuser
10/10/11
LOL. I didn't notice that before
TheJGamer
01/28/17
Oh gosh, Kirby's the worst painter ever.
Ultizeta
05/18/17
Other than new, non-blurry borders, I only made one small change to this page. See if you can figure out what it is by comparing it to the original page.
CapedLuigisYoshi
05/19/17
Okay, I've been looking at this and the original version for like fifteen minutes now and I can't tell any difference aside from the panel borders. I've just about given up, what's the small change?
Ultizeta
05/19/17
@CapedLuigisYoshi:
The bottom left two pixels in the "k" in panel 5 were missing for some reason in the original comic.
CapedLuigisYoshi
05/19/17
@Ultizeta:
...what
well, dang, I'm glad that's solved, but
how did you even notice that
Part 6
Ulti's Notes:
One major benefit of me going back to early comics at a point where I was making comics MUCH later was that I was able to sneak in little gags like this when remaking pages that were originally lackluster, as sort of retroactive references/call-forwards. Needless to say, expect ninjitsu and living plants to get referenced again in the future of the comic.
Also, to potentially help put into a bit of perspective how long ago this all was for me: between the previous page and now, I did my first ever Let's Play of Mega Man 2 on YouTube. Crazy, huh?
Also, to potentially help put into a bit of perspective how long ago this all was for me: between the previous page and now, I did my first ever Let's Play of Mega Man 2 on YouTube. Crazy, huh?
Original Author's Comment:
10/21/10
Guess who's baaaaack?
It's me, idiots.
Anyway, sorry about the very long wait. I felt this comic was getting out of hand, and I needed to decide what to do with it. In the end, I decided to make it what it was originally intended to be: just a random comic with the same characters who do random things. Hardly any plots, none of them major, that'll be all.
So if you don't like that, you can unfav this and I won't care. It's my decision.
On the comic itself now, I've changed the sequence's name from 'The Plan' to 'Average Days For Unaverage Puffs'. The reason for this is just to give the characters more spotlight, give you more time to become familiar with them. I'll also use their names more often. This way, I hope that the characters become recognizable.
On this particular comic, we scene change from Kirby and Hali to this group. The comic shows more of Kaxo's destructive personality, but it was mostly done for laughs.
With that, I bid you good day.
Guess who's baaaaack?
It's me, idiots.
Anyway, sorry about the very long wait. I felt this comic was getting out of hand, and I needed to decide what to do with it. In the end, I decided to make it what it was originally intended to be: just a random comic with the same characters who do random things. Hardly any plots, none of them major, that'll be all.
So if you don't like that, you can unfav this and I won't care. It's my decision.
On the comic itself now, I've changed the sequence's name from 'The Plan' to 'Average Days For Unaverage Puffs'. The reason for this is just to give the characters more spotlight, give you more time to become familiar with them. I'll also use their names more often. This way, I hope that the characters become recognizable.
On this particular comic, we scene change from Kirby and Hali to this group. The comic shows more of Kaxo's destructive personality, but it was mostly done for laughs.
With that, I bid you good day.
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
guestuser
10/21/10
Eh, I like randomness, so I'm all for it.
Ultraluario64
10/21/10
i like kaxo's ieda! infact, i have the nukes right here!
Silverlilly
10/21/10
No, I am against blowing things up!
kirbypuff
10/22/10
I like this
guestuser
10/27/10
BOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!!!!!(I also agree with Kaxo)>:)
guestuser
02/24/11
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Smashfan56
06/05/12
Michael Bay would be proud.
TheJGamer
01/28/17
Kaxo is a pyromaniac, guys.
Ultizeta
05/18/17
Man, I remember when this segment was called The Plan. Heck, I also remember when it was Average Days For Unaverage Puffs. Now it's just Average Days. Good times.
Anyways, I completely rewrote this entire comic, and even added a new panel! It works a lot better than the original now, and even makes reference to a fun little noodle incident that may seem familiar to readers. Retcons are fun.
guestuser
07/13/17
We came across a tribe of living plants today. Then Kaxo blew them up.
10/21/10
Eh, I like randomness, so I'm all for it.
Ultraluario64
10/21/10
i like kaxo's ieda! infact, i have the nukes right here!
Silverlilly
10/21/10
No, I am against blowing things up!
kirbypuff
10/22/10
I like this
guestuser
10/27/10
BOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMM!!!!!!!!!(I also agree with Kaxo)>:)
guestuser
02/24/11
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Smashfan56
06/05/12
Michael Bay would be proud.
TheJGamer
01/28/17
Kaxo is a pyromaniac, guys.
Ultizeta
05/18/17
Man, I remember when this segment was called The Plan. Heck, I also remember when it was Average Days For Unaverage Puffs. Now it's just Average Days. Good times.
Anyways, I completely rewrote this entire comic, and even added a new panel! It works a lot better than the original now, and even makes reference to a fun little noodle incident that may seem familiar to readers. Retcons are fun.
guestuser
07/13/17
We came across a tribe of living plants today. Then Kaxo blew them up.
Part 7
Ulti's Notes:
Saia's Stored Ability, shown in a very un-flashy manner here, is the Parasol ability. In the Kirby games, it's a surprisingly useful power, as it can used as a battering melee attack as well as a shield to block explosives and incoming projectiles. In the air, it also allows Kirby to float gently down, like a parachute. This versatility makes it one of the better powers in the Kirby series, despite appearances.
It felt fitting to give it to Saia, given the feminine mother-hen vibe I wanted to give her character. This is about the time I started to figure that out for her, rather than the initial well-meaning ditz she was displayed as.
It felt fitting to give it to Saia, given the feminine mother-hen vibe I wanted to give her character. This is about the time I started to figure that out for her, rather than the initial well-meaning ditz she was displayed as.
Original Author's Comment:
10/22/10
Ummm, right.
Randomness aside, yes that IS the Kirby we saw in The First Mission - Part 17. His big plan was ruined by an umbrella to the face.
...or was it?
Kaxo's last comment is "What, that? That sort of thing happens all of the time. We take it in stride."
Ummm, right.
Randomness aside, yes that IS the Kirby we saw in The First Mission - Part 17. His big plan was ruined by an umbrella to the face.
...or was it?
Kaxo's last comment is "What, that? That sort of thing happens all of the time. We take it in stride."
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
AvoryAzion
10/22/10
Hey, do you accept cameos?
locoroco1
10/22/10
We need those kirbys running the country.
Ultimate Yoshi
10/22/10
@AvoryAzion:
It depends. What do you want to cameo for? A client? Or maybe somebody in the Squad? It depends.
AvoryAzion
10/23/10
@Ultimate Yoshi:
Well, maybe my Kirby can be a transfer from another division (Most likely Beta). His name is White Jade Kirby, or WJ for short.
guestuser
10/23/10
Was Caiya gonna suggest doughnuts?
guestuser
10/23/10
I was expecting something else of that plan that blue kirby had. Now i'm reading the comic again and again because i think its hilarious xD
Ultimate Yoshi
10/23/10
@AvoryAzion:
Hmmm...
I suppose so, but just so you know, most cameos won't show up too often. Do you have a sprite sheet? It has to be KSSU styled, just so you know.
AvoryAzion
10/24/10
@Ultimate Yoshi:
I figured, yes it's KSSU styled. And i was thinking he could be part of a far off plot. You know, with an important role and such.
Gobbler9
10/24/10
that Talzo has a plan. o_O
guestuser
10/27/10
I think I know a good stored copy essence deluxe 4 Hali: STONE.
Ultimate Yoshi
10/27/10
@guestuser:
You don't need to shout random ideas at me. I have things figured out, you know. >:c
As for the idea itself, I didn't give Hali a stored ability because I couldn't think of one. I didn't give Hali a stored ability because I didn't want her to HAVE one.
guestuser
10/28/10
@Gobbler9:
Who's Talzo?
Ultimate Yoshi
10/28/10
@guestuser:
Just noticed that now. Mister gobbler must have done his Kirby Adventure research. Won't say anything, it'll show soon in-comic.
guestuser
11/07/10
That's not a plan. He just ran head-on towards the prey.
nitendoruler300
11/18/10
can i have a cameo it dosent realy matter what my cameo is. his name is phantom, he looks a little like shadic but i think readers could tell the difference
Shadowsolstice
12/14/10
Purple kirby should have ninja ability. That would be epic :3
guestuser
12/31/10
hey what caya liked dotonuts i do not know!
Gobbler9
08/22/11
Eh heh heh.....
TheJGamer
01/28/17
*SPLAT*
There goes the mystery Kirby!
Ultizeta
05/18/17
The blue Kirby is a bit less violent now, and Kaxo and Vezo's dialogue in the last panel is actually readable!
CapedLuigisYoshi
05/18/17
...oh wow I completely forgot Talzo showed up this way.
10/22/10
Hey, do you accept cameos?
locoroco1
10/22/10
We need those kirbys running the country.
Ultimate Yoshi
10/22/10
@AvoryAzion:
It depends. What do you want to cameo for? A client? Or maybe somebody in the Squad? It depends.
AvoryAzion
10/23/10
@Ultimate Yoshi:
Well, maybe my Kirby can be a transfer from another division (Most likely Beta). His name is White Jade Kirby, or WJ for short.
guestuser
10/23/10
Was Caiya gonna suggest doughnuts?
guestuser
10/23/10
I was expecting something else of that plan that blue kirby had. Now i'm reading the comic again and again because i think its hilarious xD
Ultimate Yoshi
10/23/10
@AvoryAzion:
Hmmm...
I suppose so, but just so you know, most cameos won't show up too often. Do you have a sprite sheet? It has to be KSSU styled, just so you know.
AvoryAzion
10/24/10
@Ultimate Yoshi:
I figured, yes it's KSSU styled. And i was thinking he could be part of a far off plot. You know, with an important role and such.
Gobbler9
10/24/10
that Talzo has a plan. o_O
guestuser
10/27/10
I think I know a good stored copy essence deluxe 4 Hali: STONE.
Ultimate Yoshi
10/27/10
@guestuser:
You don't need to shout random ideas at me. I have things figured out, you know. >:c
As for the idea itself, I didn't give Hali a stored ability because I couldn't think of one. I didn't give Hali a stored ability because I didn't want her to HAVE one.
guestuser
10/28/10
@Gobbler9:
Who's Talzo?
Ultimate Yoshi
10/28/10
@guestuser:
Just noticed that now. Mister gobbler must have done his Kirby Adventure research. Won't say anything, it'll show soon in-comic.
guestuser
11/07/10
That's not a plan. He just ran head-on towards the prey.
nitendoruler300
11/18/10
can i have a cameo it dosent realy matter what my cameo is. his name is phantom, he looks a little like shadic but i think readers could tell the difference
Shadowsolstice
12/14/10
Purple kirby should have ninja ability. That would be epic :3
guestuser
12/31/10
hey what caya liked dotonuts i do not know!
Gobbler9
08/22/11
Eh heh heh.....
TheJGamer
01/28/17
*SPLAT*
There goes the mystery Kirby!
Ultizeta
05/18/17
The blue Kirby is a bit less violent now, and Kaxo and Vezo's dialogue in the last panel is actually readable!
CapedLuigisYoshi
05/18/17
...oh wow I completely forgot Talzo showed up this way.
Part 7A
Ulti's Notes:
This was probably the scene that most needed to be shown via a brand new bonus comic. I made this one on 1/13/21, and it was pivotal because without this page, the scenes with Hali and Kirby were infamously dropped and never followed-up-on.
My past self had decided that whatever route I was leading up to, it didn't feel interesting and I wanted to just go back to goofy antics, rather than having a serious discussion between Hali and Kirby. And then I stopped doing goofy antics and started taking the comic at least a little more seriously by the time of the next segment, so it just ultimately felt exceedingly awkward to have started set up for a conversation, never followed through on it, and focused on entirely other things instead. Making this bonus page let me correct things by at least allowing the build-up to have felt like it was meaning something.
And hey, I still managed to make it silly on some level, so take that, past Ulti.
My past self had decided that whatever route I was leading up to, it didn't feel interesting and I wanted to just go back to goofy antics, rather than having a serious discussion between Hali and Kirby. And then I stopped doing goofy antics and started taking the comic at least a little more seriously by the time of the next segment, so it just ultimately felt exceedingly awkward to have started set up for a conversation, never followed through on it, and focused on entirely other things instead. Making this bonus page let me correct things by at least allowing the build-up to have felt like it was meaning something.
And hey, I still managed to make it silly on some level, so take that, past Ulti.
Part 8
Ulti's Notes:
Arglabjaljglagjg
If Shat'l was my biggest mistake in a grander picture, according to one of my previous Notes sections, this set of 2 comic pages was probably my biggest mistake in a microcosm. I really, genuinely, absolutely, never should have made these two pages, and I sorely regretted it even only a few pages later.
The main issue with them being the big fourth wall break on Shat'l's part, which I only barely managed to tone down in the revised version of the comic, and also the fact that it allowed Shadik to "speak". Yeah, he's not technically speaking, and that was the excuse I was able to roll with in order to feel like I still had some bit of integrity with Shadik's silence, but... it really just may as well have been speaking, for all intents and purposes. This one small scene really hindered the effect of Shadik's silence as a character, and I was pretty glad that at the very least, most readers forgot this ever even happened.
Now, one could ask, if I was going back later in the comic's lifespan and making revised versions of these pages, why didn't I just rewrite this or omit it entirely? And the answer to that, for me, was integrity. I wanted to maintain the original intent of Kirby Adventure as much as possible, while mostly just cleaning it up. While there were some personality tweaks and dialogue changes or additions, I really didn't want to just actively rewrite that much, even to cover up massive mistakes like this.
It'd be one thing to change some dialogue to make a bit more sense like I did for many other pages, but omitting an entire scene or completely changing it up feels like it would've been a bit of a step too far for me. Even for bad things like this, I wanted to preserve the general way in which I was writing from back then. This was a thing that happened in Kirby Adventure, and there was no getting around that fact for me, so I just instead tried to make it as presentable as I could, instead of ignoring it.
If Shat'l was my biggest mistake in a grander picture, according to one of my previous Notes sections, this set of 2 comic pages was probably my biggest mistake in a microcosm. I really, genuinely, absolutely, never should have made these two pages, and I sorely regretted it even only a few pages later.
The main issue with them being the big fourth wall break on Shat'l's part, which I only barely managed to tone down in the revised version of the comic, and also the fact that it allowed Shadik to "speak". Yeah, he's not technically speaking, and that was the excuse I was able to roll with in order to feel like I still had some bit of integrity with Shadik's silence, but... it really just may as well have been speaking, for all intents and purposes. This one small scene really hindered the effect of Shadik's silence as a character, and I was pretty glad that at the very least, most readers forgot this ever even happened.
Now, one could ask, if I was going back later in the comic's lifespan and making revised versions of these pages, why didn't I just rewrite this or omit it entirely? And the answer to that, for me, was integrity. I wanted to maintain the original intent of Kirby Adventure as much as possible, while mostly just cleaning it up. While there were some personality tweaks and dialogue changes or additions, I really didn't want to just actively rewrite that much, even to cover up massive mistakes like this.
It'd be one thing to change some dialogue to make a bit more sense like I did for many other pages, but omitting an entire scene or completely changing it up feels like it would've been a bit of a step too far for me. Even for bad things like this, I wanted to preserve the general way in which I was writing from back then. This was a thing that happened in Kirby Adventure, and there was no getting around that fact for me, so I just instead tried to make it as presentable as I could, instead of ignoring it.
Original Author's Comment:
11/25/10
Welp, there goes the fourth wall.
Shat'l gets some more spotlight, and our apparent fan-favorite (as far as I can tell, concerning the comments) Shadik shows up as well.
Welp, there goes the fourth wall.
Shat'l gets some more spotlight, and our apparent fan-favorite (as far as I can tell, concerning the comments) Shadik shows up as well.
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
Fusion Kirby
11/26/10
May I cameo? I have Some Meta-Knight Sprites in the Making, But feel free to use my Kirby sprites in Fiora's Sprite Showcase! I'll give the Link Later. *Adds to fav's*
guestuser
11/26/10
Ah, fourth-wall. Does breaking it ever get tiresome? ...Nope. XD
Also, wow. Shadik has barely been established, and he's already the comic's Ensemble Darkhorse. ...Look it up on TvTropes.
Ultimate Yoshi
11/26/10
@Fusion Kirby:
Finally, someone who wants a cameo and actually (sort of) gives me a sprite sheet.
If you'd like a cameo, I'm only taking them for people giving tasks to the Squad. So, PM me what you'd like them to do, and I'll see if I can make it happen.
locoroco1
11/26/10
I like Vezo.
DarkMario1000
11/26/10
Psi Starstorm Ω
Luigi_96
11/26/10
I WOULD cameo,but I don't have KSSU sprites. :/
guestuser
10/10/11
Of corce Shidik is the fan favorite! He's an awesome black kirby
TheJGamer
01/28/17
I would cameo too, but I only have sprites for Kirby's Adventure... =P
Ultizeta
05/18/17
I'm unfortunately never going to be able to live this early page down, but I can at least make it look nicer. The thought bubbles were updated significantly, as well as Shat'l's power visual effect thing.
11/26/10
May I cameo? I have Some Meta-Knight Sprites in the Making, But feel free to use my Kirby sprites in Fiora's Sprite Showcase! I'll give the Link Later. *Adds to fav's*
guestuser
11/26/10
Ah, fourth-wall. Does breaking it ever get tiresome? ...Nope. XD
Also, wow. Shadik has barely been established, and he's already the comic's Ensemble Darkhorse. ...Look it up on TvTropes.
Ultimate Yoshi
11/26/10
@Fusion Kirby:
Finally, someone who wants a cameo and actually (sort of) gives me a sprite sheet.
If you'd like a cameo, I'm only taking them for people giving tasks to the Squad. So, PM me what you'd like them to do, and I'll see if I can make it happen.
locoroco1
11/26/10
I like Vezo.
DarkMario1000
11/26/10
Psi Starstorm Ω
Luigi_96
11/26/10
I WOULD cameo,but I don't have KSSU sprites. :/
guestuser
10/10/11
Of corce Shidik is the fan favorite! He's an awesome black kirby
TheJGamer
01/28/17
I would cameo too, but I only have sprites for Kirby's Adventure... =P
Ultizeta
05/18/17
I'm unfortunately never going to be able to live this early page down, but I can at least make it look nicer. The thought bubbles were updated significantly, as well as Shat'l's power visual effect thing.
Part 9
Ulti's Notes:
On the plus side, these two pages did at least let me make this joke, which still makes me smirk.
Original Author's Comment:
11/30/10
I needed to go somewhere with Shat'l and Shadik, and this was the only thing I could think of.
Not sure if I spelt 'Apocalypse' correctly.
Also, brand new banner! :D
I needed to go somewhere with Shat'l and Shadik, and this was the only thing I could think of.
Not sure if I spelt 'Apocalypse' correctly.
Also, brand new banner! :D
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
Kirbysmith [DJ]
11/30/10
Lol, that was hilarious!
And yes, you spelt it right.
Luigi_96
11/30/10
Hey, nice new banner!
guestuser
11/30/10
Okay, we've already seen the blue Kirby in the new banner (though we have yet to learn his name)... but who's the dark, purple Kirby on the far right of the banner?
guestuser
12/01/10
I don't get it.... Funny, but i just don't get it. Oh well. Great comic!
NoahTH
01/08/11
Oh crap, she will trigger the Apocalypse!
guestuser
02/26/11
whhhh...at!?
TheJGamer
01/28/17
ummmmmmmmmm
Ultizeta
05/18/17
...If I wasn't sure if I spelled apocalypse correctly, why did I not just look it up??? 13-year old Ulti was truly an enigma.
Anyways, I fixed up the thought text in this page, and that was about it.
MarioMadness734
06/30/17
RUN FOR YOUR LIVES IT'S A SIGN OF THE APOCALYPSE
11/30/10
Lol, that was hilarious!
And yes, you spelt it right.
Luigi_96
11/30/10
Hey, nice new banner!
guestuser
11/30/10
Okay, we've already seen the blue Kirby in the new banner (though we have yet to learn his name)... but who's the dark, purple Kirby on the far right of the banner?
guestuser
12/01/10
I don't get it.... Funny, but i just don't get it. Oh well. Great comic!
NoahTH
01/08/11
Oh crap, she will trigger the Apocalypse!
guestuser
02/26/11
whhhh...at!?
TheJGamer
01/28/17
ummmmmmmmmm
Ultizeta
05/18/17
...If I wasn't sure if I spelled apocalypse correctly, why did I not just look it up??? 13-year old Ulti was truly an enigma.
Anyways, I fixed up the thought text in this page, and that was about it.
MarioMadness734
06/30/17
RUN FOR YOUR LIVES IT'S A SIGN OF THE APOCALYPSE
Part 10
Ulti's Notes:
When I eventually include the character of Meta Knight in these comics, who himself is a slightly darker blue character than this dark blue Kirby is, I used that darker blue for his text bubble and people complained that it was nearly unreadable. Eventually, I conceded the point and stopped being stubborn, and went back and made revised comic pages in every page Meta Knight spoke in to fix his speech bubble color.
I bring that up here because, evidently, I never thought that this blue Kirby's text bubbles were ALSO too dark to read, so unfortunately, this is the color they're gonna be the entire time of the comic. It's not quite as bad as MK's original text bubbles, but man... hindsight is 20/20, isn't it?
I bring that up here because, evidently, I never thought that this blue Kirby's text bubbles were ALSO too dark to read, so unfortunately, this is the color they're gonna be the entire time of the comic. It's not quite as bad as MK's original text bubbles, but man... hindsight is 20/20, isn't it?
Original Author's Comment:
12/01/10
Stuff happens.
Blaa
Stuff happens.
Blaa
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
guestuser
12/01/10
ummmmm
Kirbysmith [DJ]
12/01/10
"Thank the gods"? I thought he'd say something a bit more Kirby-related, like "Thank N.O.V.A."
I say, that's a nice energy cage you got there, sir.
That just proves to show why kirbies don't make the best villains.
Ultimate Yoshi
12/01/10
NOVA isn't really a god. The Kirby series doesn't really have gods, the closest I can think of is 02. But this Kirby isn't evil enough to worship a dead white eyeball.
guestuser
12/01/10
Seriously, what is this guy's name?
DarkMario1000
12/01/10
Kudos to anyone who got meh reference
locoroco1
12/01/10
Let me guess. He's gonna break out.
guestuser
12/02/10
How often does the comic update?
guestuser
12/07/10
He does it when he feels like it. There was a post about it in his other comic, I think.
Drawkey
09/24/11
I-forget-his-name swearing was kinda startling for this comic. By the way.
Smashfan56
06/05/12
And a green... farting... thorn... wang... thing? Yes.
Ecaroh914
06/19/13
Even tho the subject's dropped, I still need to do this:
02 is basicly an after life image of the original 0. It looks like an angel, until you make it angry, or reveal it's cactus butt thing.
0 is a giant eyeball with another eyeball in it.
they both have red eyeballs...bloody...
161616
12/11/14
So why did Kirby and Hali pop in there? It seems kinda pointless.
TheJGamer
01/28/17
Blue Kirby seems to have godlike powers!
Ultizeta
05/18/17
Holy crap, this page was a MESS to revisit. I had to completely rewrite it from the ground up in order for it to make any degree of sense considering where I end up taking the comic's story.
The changes are very noteworthy,
guestuser
07/13/17
"All our history, what?"
What does that mean?
12/01/10
ummmmm
Kirbysmith [DJ]
12/01/10
"Thank the gods"? I thought he'd say something a bit more Kirby-related, like "Thank N.O.V.A."
I say, that's a nice energy cage you got there, sir.
That just proves to show why kirbies don't make the best villains.
Ultimate Yoshi
12/01/10
NOVA isn't really a god. The Kirby series doesn't really have gods, the closest I can think of is 02. But this Kirby isn't evil enough to worship a dead white eyeball.
guestuser
12/01/10
Seriously, what is this guy's name?
DarkMario1000
12/01/10
Kudos to anyone who got meh reference
locoroco1
12/01/10
Let me guess. He's gonna break out.
guestuser
12/02/10
How often does the comic update?
guestuser
12/07/10
He does it when he feels like it. There was a post about it in his other comic, I think.
Drawkey
09/24/11
I-forget-his-name swearing was kinda startling for this comic. By the way.
Smashfan56
06/05/12
And a green... farting... thorn... wang... thing? Yes.
Ecaroh914
06/19/13
Even tho the subject's dropped, I still need to do this:
02 is basicly an after life image of the original 0. It looks like an angel, until you make it angry, or reveal it's cactus butt thing.
0 is a giant eyeball with another eyeball in it.
they both have red eyeballs...bloody...
161616
12/11/14
So why did Kirby and Hali pop in there? It seems kinda pointless.
TheJGamer
01/28/17
Blue Kirby seems to have godlike powers!
Ultizeta
05/18/17
Holy crap, this page was a MESS to revisit. I had to completely rewrite it from the ground up in order for it to make any degree of sense considering where I end up taking the comic's story.
The changes are very noteworthy,
guestuser
07/13/17
"All our history, what?"
What does that mean?
Part 11
Ulti's Notes:
This is still one of my favorite Kirby Adventure comics across the whole 700-page run. It's simple, yet effectively funny.
Original Author's Comment:
12/02/10
I don't know where this came from.
It just HAPPENED.
I don't know where this came from.
It just HAPPENED.
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
guestuser
12/02/10
Who is he guarding, that nasty blue kirby?
BattleStarX
12/02/10
Don't fight randomness, Yoshi. It makes the world go 'round.
DarkMario1000
12/03/10
Intelligent at times, an idiot at times
guestuser
10/22/11
hey ultimate yoshi! can you send me your sprites you use? i really want to make a kirby comic of my own! just post them in a post so i can use them! i'll send you my finished comic to!
guestuser
06/16/12
Here in the future, I see many weird things happened.
SkyyKirby44
07/18/12
And to this day Kaxo never underestimated Cayia again
guestuser
01/01/13
LOL love the way you spelled "BUU"
guestuser
11/04/15
An apple a day keeps the doctor away but an onion keeps away everyone. In this case, Cayia's the onion.
TheJGamer
01/28/17
And that's why everyone hates Caiya...
Ultizeta
05/18/17
Sometimes, I still find myself impressed with how even some of my early comics' sense of humor still holds up. I didn't change any of the dialogue here, only updated some text visuals.
12/02/10
Who is he guarding, that nasty blue kirby?
BattleStarX
12/02/10
Don't fight randomness, Yoshi. It makes the world go 'round.
DarkMario1000
12/03/10
Intelligent at times, an idiot at times
guestuser
10/22/11
hey ultimate yoshi! can you send me your sprites you use? i really want to make a kirby comic of my own! just post them in a post so i can use them! i'll send you my finished comic to!
guestuser
06/16/12
Here in the future, I see many weird things happened.
SkyyKirby44
07/18/12
And to this day Kaxo never underestimated Cayia again
guestuser
01/01/13
LOL love the way you spelled "BUU"
guestuser
11/04/15
An apple a day keeps the doctor away but an onion keeps away everyone. In this case, Cayia's the onion.
TheJGamer
01/28/17
And that's why everyone hates Caiya...
Ultizeta
05/18/17
Sometimes, I still find myself impressed with how even some of my early comics' sense of humor still holds up. I didn't change any of the dialogue here, only updated some text visuals.
Part 12
Ulti's Notes:
The Pep Brew was the original name for a common health-restoring item in the Kirby games. It's been since renamed to simply being called an Energy Drink, but I'll always prefer the name of a Pep Brew. Anyways, while it's not really anything more than a typical healing item like most other foods in the Kirby games, here I elected to make it quite sugary, in order to give it that extra 'pep' like the name might suggest.
Of course, characters getting a sugar high isn't a new joke, especially when it comes to normally-stoic characters, but this at least helped me continue down the line of Saia trying to be motherly and look out for her fellow squadmates.
Of course, characters getting a sugar high isn't a new joke, especially when it comes to normally-stoic characters, but this at least helped me continue down the line of Saia trying to be motherly and look out for her fellow squadmates.
Original Author's Comment:
12/03/10
Do you have an idea as to what the heck just happened?
Because I sure don't.
Do you have an idea as to what the heck just happened?
Because I sure don't.
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
Kirbysmith [DJ]
12/03/10
Average days? I think not!
guestuser
12/03/10
@Kirbysmith:
No, this is probably pretty normal for them. XD
BattleStarX
12/03/10
If this is a normal day for these kirbies, I'd hate to see what a weird day is.
Actually, scratch that. I would LOVE to see a weird day.
DarkMario1000
12/04/10
I don't wanna know what may happen when it's an inaverage day…oh god…
guestuser
12/05/10
Yeah, this one's REALLY random considering, in the last strip, Raize had just been scared by Caiya outside the base, and here, Saya is chasing a hyper Raise THROUGH the base... Just an odd continuity thing that would bug me if this comic wasn't INTENDED to be random.
Ultimate Yoshi
12/06/10
@guestuser:
You'll also notice they somehow end up outside in Green Greens within one comic strip.
It's not intended to make sense.
guestuser
12/13/10
Or brilliance? (Laughs at Raize)
guestuser
05/13/11
LOLZ! Cracked me up within seconds, one I figured it out.
lstaff4
05/13/12
pep brew are NUTSY
Luigi_96
12/20/13
Come to think of it, how does one eat a pep brew?
TheJGamer
01/28/17
Pep Brew! Get one today! 100% pure sugar, and yet heals only a small bit of your health because Kirby logic can be stupid!
Ultizeta
05/18/17
I updated the punchline on this strip so that it worked a little better. Vezo seemed a bit too mean agreeing with Blue Kirby here originally.
12/03/10
Average days? I think not!
guestuser
12/03/10
@Kirbysmith:
No, this is probably pretty normal for them. XD
BattleStarX
12/03/10
If this is a normal day for these kirbies, I'd hate to see what a weird day is.
Actually, scratch that. I would LOVE to see a weird day.
DarkMario1000
12/04/10
I don't wanna know what may happen when it's an inaverage day…oh god…
guestuser
12/05/10
Yeah, this one's REALLY random considering, in the last strip, Raize had just been scared by Caiya outside the base, and here, Saya is chasing a hyper Raise THROUGH the base... Just an odd continuity thing that would bug me if this comic wasn't INTENDED to be random.
Ultimate Yoshi
12/06/10
@guestuser:
You'll also notice they somehow end up outside in Green Greens within one comic strip.
It's not intended to make sense.
guestuser
12/13/10
Or brilliance? (Laughs at Raize)
guestuser
05/13/11
LOLZ! Cracked me up within seconds, one I figured it out.
lstaff4
05/13/12
pep brew are NUTSY
Luigi_96
12/20/13
Come to think of it, how does one eat a pep brew?
TheJGamer
01/28/17
Pep Brew! Get one today! 100% pure sugar, and yet heals only a small bit of your health because Kirby logic can be stupid!
Ultizeta
05/18/17
I updated the punchline on this strip so that it worked a little better. Vezo seemed a bit too mean agreeing with Blue Kirby here originally.
Part 13
Ulti's Notes:
Given how I was showing the very vague layout of the Kirby Adventure Squad Headquarters these past few comics, it's honestly quite questionable how in the heck Saia chased a sugar-crazed Raize all the way back to Green Greens during all of this, especially since they'd have needed to climb that whole wooden base section and come out of that hut there, then turned back around in order for Raize to faceplant into that specific wall. If I were to redo this, I'd likely have put this pair in a different location for this page, just to avoid somebody like Me-14-Years-Later overly-nitpicking it, lol.
Original Author's Comment:
12/04/10
I've got nothing.
I think this sequence is just about done, there's only so much 'average' things these characters can do.
I've got nothing.
I think this sequence is just about done, there's only so much 'average' things these characters can do.
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
Djoing
12/04/10
hm... something I've been meaning to ask... if you were to give all 10 (11 if you count the evil one) puffballs a kirby ability, which would they have?
Ultimate Yoshi
12/04/10
I actually have given most of them Stored copy Abilities (see The First Mission Part 12), which can be seen on the KAS Member Files page.
Or for convienient purposes, here they are:
Kirby - Sword
Keito (yellow) - Beam
Caiya (blue) - Ice
Kaxo (red) - Fire
Saia (purple) - Parasol
Raize (green) - Plasma
Vezo (orange) - Cutter
Hali, Shat'l, and Shadik don't have Stored Abilities, but if they did, I'd make them something among the lines of Stone, Mirror, and Crash (respectively). The dark blue Kirby has a Stored Ability, but I'm not gonna reveal that yet.
locoroco1
12/04/10
@Ultimate Yoshi:
Doesn't Shadik have those wierd shadow powers?
DarkMario1000
12/04/10
Electricity! Not Plasma…Electricity!
guestuser
12/04/10
There's something I've been meaning to ask... is the dark blue Kirby who wants to destroy the Squad a former member of the squad?
Kirbysmith [DJ]
12/05/10
@locoroco1:
Yes, but according to his profile, it's not a Copy ability per se. The same could be said for Shat'l and her psychic powers.
On a side note, I think "Shadik" sounds too much like "Shadic."
Ultimate Yoshi
12/05/10
@Kirbysmith [DJ]:
Right on all accounts, except Shat'l is male.
What is Shadic?
guestuser
12/05/10
If you give Shat'l the mirror ability i'm gonna die. Psychic, my favorite color AND favorite ability :DDD
DarkNut255
12/17/10
This comic looks... weird with the new layout...
NoahTH
01/08/11
Ultimate Yoshi,
Shadic is a popular Sonic fan character made from the fusion of Sonic and Shadow.
castleofwarriors
09/25/11
Heh. This comic makes me lol.
lstaff4
05/13/12
Raize's hyper mode goes into a future character. But I won't tell who. I'm mean aren't I? >:D
castleofwarriors
07/03/12
@lstaff4:
You mean FP?
guestuser
07/23/14
CANDYYYYYYYYYYYY!
dutchguy1986
08/12/16
This doesn't exactly fit with Raize's character description
TheJGamer
01/28/17
What's a stored ability?
Ultizeta
05/18/17
What was I even thinking when it came to the original version of this page's layout? So horizontal for absolutely no reason. I fixed that this time.
I also fixed the punchline, since Raize literally never does this again.
12/04/10
hm... something I've been meaning to ask... if you were to give all 10 (11 if you count the evil one) puffballs a kirby ability, which would they have?
Ultimate Yoshi
12/04/10
I actually have given most of them Stored copy Abilities (see The First Mission Part 12), which can be seen on the KAS Member Files page.
Or for convienient purposes, here they are:
Kirby - Sword
Keito (yellow) - Beam
Caiya (blue) - Ice
Kaxo (red) - Fire
Saia (purple) - Parasol
Raize (green) - Plasma
Vezo (orange) - Cutter
Hali, Shat'l, and Shadik don't have Stored Abilities, but if they did, I'd make them something among the lines of Stone, Mirror, and Crash (respectively). The dark blue Kirby has a Stored Ability, but I'm not gonna reveal that yet.
locoroco1
12/04/10
@Ultimate Yoshi:
Doesn't Shadik have those wierd shadow powers?
DarkMario1000
12/04/10
Electricity! Not Plasma…Electricity!
guestuser
12/04/10
There's something I've been meaning to ask... is the dark blue Kirby who wants to destroy the Squad a former member of the squad?
Kirbysmith [DJ]
12/05/10
@locoroco1:
Yes, but according to his profile, it's not a Copy ability per se. The same could be said for Shat'l and her psychic powers.
On a side note, I think "Shadik" sounds too much like "Shadic."
Ultimate Yoshi
12/05/10
@Kirbysmith [DJ]:
Right on all accounts, except Shat'l is male.
What is Shadic?
guestuser
12/05/10
If you give Shat'l the mirror ability i'm gonna die. Psychic, my favorite color AND favorite ability :DDD
DarkNut255
12/17/10
This comic looks... weird with the new layout...
NoahTH
01/08/11
Ultimate Yoshi,
Shadic is a popular Sonic fan character made from the fusion of Sonic and Shadow.
castleofwarriors
09/25/11
Heh. This comic makes me lol.
lstaff4
05/13/12
Raize's hyper mode goes into a future character. But I won't tell who. I'm mean aren't I? >:D
castleofwarriors
07/03/12
@lstaff4:
You mean FP?
guestuser
07/23/14
CANDYYYYYYYYYYYY!
dutchguy1986
08/12/16
This doesn't exactly fit with Raize's character description
TheJGamer
01/28/17
What's a stored ability?
Ultizeta
05/18/17
What was I even thinking when it came to the original version of this page's layout? So horizontal for absolutely no reason. I fixed that this time.
I also fixed the punchline, since Raize literally never does this again.
Part 13A
Ulti's Notes:
When trying to figure out where to put another bonus comic into the Average Days segment on 1/13/21, since I was still aiming to make 2 bonus pages per segment, I initially wasn't sure where I could put one. The last page, though, actually made me realize a tiny plot inconsistency I could patch up.
Kaxo was on guard duty during the "BUU!!!" page, but when Saia was chasing Raize, he was nowhere to be seen. So, I came up with a comic that could explain where he went. I THINK the original intent, based on the segment name, was that these comic pages were all taking place across several days, but after a lot of real life time passed, I tended to view Average Days as only one day of in-universe time. This was mostly because of the capture of the blue Kirby, who I didn't want to have spent multiple days sitting in his cage. So, because of that, Kaxo's disappearing act was a small plot hole that I could now patch up.
This was the final bonus page I wound up making, and I never did any more than this. So, in a weird way, this was the very last Kirby Adventure page I ever made. Funny how things work out, huh?
Kaxo was on guard duty during the "BUU!!!" page, but when Saia was chasing Raize, he was nowhere to be seen. So, I came up with a comic that could explain where he went. I THINK the original intent, based on the segment name, was that these comic pages were all taking place across several days, but after a lot of real life time passed, I tended to view Average Days as only one day of in-universe time. This was mostly because of the capture of the blue Kirby, who I didn't want to have spent multiple days sitting in his cage. So, because of that, Kaxo's disappearing act was a small plot hole that I could now patch up.
This was the final bonus page I wound up making, and I never did any more than this. So, in a weird way, this was the very last Kirby Adventure page I ever made. Funny how things work out, huh?
Ulti's Notes:
This one introduces more of the idea of what the Kirby Adventure Squad is, beyond the 9 characters we've already seen. I had it in my mind to make it a full-on organization, mostly because of some police procedural dramas that I was watching around the time of creating KA. The predominant one of inspiration being the navy cop show NCIS, which heavily influenced the early relationship between Kirby and the new character Director Hali here. I even mention it in some original author comments, I believe.
Hali (named quite similarly to the Bionicle named Gali) was a rough character for a very long while in Kirby Adventure, mostly because I never quite knew what exactly to do with her. She had a weirdly adversarial relationship with most of the characters for a while, and frankly, I think the main problem just comes from the fact that I never really... had her DO anything. I called her a Director for the KAS, but that job title kinda wound up being meaningless, outside of the general vibe of "she's the boss". In retrospect, the necessities of the role in an in-universe sense should have been more evident, but she rarely does that much leadership or corraling, nor does she have any outside agencies to interact with or anything. Ultimately, I think I simply bit off a bit too much to chew.
Also, the original page's line of "I'll try not to get too wild" was a line I took from one of the physical Order of the Stick bonus books, in basically this exact same concept of someone's earnings being whittled down by the boss. Obviously, when revising the page, I wanted to actually write my own content, so I fixed the plagiarism, thankfully.
Original Author's Comment:
New segment, new character, new... newness, I guess. That brown Kirby you see is the director of the Kirby Adventure Squad as a whole. And it's a girl. Yes.
And no, Keito is not evil. He's just... ambitious. And you'd do that too if all you get from working is 10 coins, or dama. By the way, the name 'dama' for coins was created by my friend Hobbez. Although I didn't exactly ask his permission for it's use, uh I mean, cookies. :P
Smack Jeeves Comments Section:
08/07/10
This comic is pretty good. I like the already large cast of characters. Can't wait for more.
guestuser
08/08/10
The brown Kirby leading being Kirby's squad is just wrong on so many levels. I mean, isn't Kirby the leader?
Ultimate Yoshi
08/08/10
Kirby is the leader of a specific division of the Kirby Adventure Squad. The Director is the leader of the entire Squad and all of the divisions. What's wrong about that?
terra the hedgehog
08/10/10
woot theres a green kirby in this thats good do you know how long ive waited for a comic like this?!?
lolwut
08/12/10
I thought Kirby founded the band.
BlagH
08/18/10
Anyone notice Caiya dropping through the ceiling then popping up again in The Plan part two?
Jarkes
09/15/10
It kind of reminds me of Power Rangers SPD, where the main team we see is the "B-Squad." Of course, there, the "A-Squad" Rangers were WILLINGLY EVIL. Which is AWESOME, because usually they're either created to be evil or brainwashed.
All right, random Power Rangers reference out of the way, the fact that they only get a small portion of the reward also reminds me of Pokemon Mystery Dungeon 2. Seriously, even after you GRADUATE from the guild, the ONLY difference is that you don't have to STAY there and you can change the team leader! You DON'T GET A HIGHER PAY AT ALL! RRRRRRGH!
...Sorry.
Ultimate Yoshi
09/18/10
terra the hedgehog - No, I don't. And honestly, I don't truly care.
lolwut - He did found the band. He's just not the total leader.
BlagH - Yes, I think I did.
Jarkes - That's actually what I got it from, slightly.
NoahTH
01/07/11
What's up with getting 90 out of 500 dama?
1ce_k1d
01/29/11
No. He only got 90 dama to give 10 dama to the rest of the team mates.
Drawkey
09/24/11
THIS IS
AN OOTS PARAPHRAAAASE
AGAIN
OOTS PARAPHRASE x2 COMBO
guestuser
10/04/11
yeah i totaley agree!in mystery dungeon time/darkness/sky if the reward is like 5000 poke then you only get like 50 or 500!
Smashfan56
06/05/12
Dama is a corruption of the Japanese word "tama" (玉), which can mean coin.
TheJGamer
01/28/17
Keito, you greedy scumbag!
Ultizeta
05/18/17
I made a new batch of KA page remakes, so let's talk what changed! Here, I fixed some text bubbles, and modified dialogue to steal less jokes from Order of the Stick.